Lily Terhune
September 25, 2014
ENGL 1100, Writing Skills Workshop
Professor Young
Community Essay
Doing work in your dorm room at Fairleigh Dickinson may be hard because of the noise coming from other rooms. Students may be playing music very loudly, or are hanging out with a lot of people in their rooms causes a distraction. Although we have a library easily accessible, sometimes doing homework or studying a dorm room may be better. Quiet hours were constructed to make it easier for students to sleep without being interrupted. Yet, sleeping is not the only thing students need quiet for. Finding time thats quiet during the day to study or do homework is a problem; therefore it would be helpful and beneficial for students if daytime quiet hours were made so students who like to work during the day in their dorm rooms can.
Fairleigh Dickinson is a beautiful campus in Madison, New Jersey. It has trees that reach up to the sky. The buildings are old and beautiful, giving meaning to the campus. Theres always students everywhere, either in the dorms or on the big open lawn spaces. Like Kinloch’s essay about Harlem, the scenery in both Harlem and Fairleigh Dickinson plays a big part of the community. The amount of students that hangout in their dorms can cause the problem of it being hard to study during the day. The noise coming from the rooms can be so loud at times that doing work or studying is tough. This problem has been ongoing for a while now I assume. Although there are quiet hours, they are only at nighttime on Sunday to Thursday from 8pm-10 am and Friday and Saturday from 12 am to 10 am.
If students use Ihomes or speakers to play music the music can be heard from one room to another. Especially if the music is being played loud, it can be a distraction to the other rooms close by. If a student is trying to study for a test, doing work can be as hard as trying to do work in a room full of people. If quiet hours during the day were implicated, it would benefit students who try to get work done in their dorm rooms during the day. Quiet hours from the hours of 2pm to 4 pm would be perfect for students.
Is this a problem for all students? Are students having trouble studying in their dorms? In Kinloch’s essay, “Harlem, Art and Literacy and Documenting ‘Harlem is Art’/ “Harlem as Art”, may people were not standing up to present the problems of Harlem being denitrified. If students do not stand up for what they believe, nothing will be accomplished. Quiet hours would be implicated for all people in the dorm building and would help a lot of students. Two hours a day to have quiet time for work is all that would be needed. Students may develop better studying habits in their dorm rooms without distractions. Without this, students may have trouble studying in their rooms and never learn good study habits inside their rooms.
I like what you have done so far. However, your ideas can be more developed through the use of specific detail. For example, if you could compare the sound of the noise to something else, what would it sound like? In what specific ways does the noise interrupt you? Who should solve this problem? Why should it be solved? If it isn't solved who would suffer?
ReplyDeleteSince you close your essay with Kinloch, it has to be mentioned a lot earlier. Where could it go? For that matter, you need to summarize the article. What is it about? What major point is she making about Harlem? What major point are you making about the noise?
Think of yourself as an investigative reporter. What type of questions might you ask to develop your point that noise is a problem? Remember to include the who, what, when, where, why and how of your paper. Investigative journalists answer these questions.
Does this help?
That definitely helped a lot! Thank you so much for your time.
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome. Always a pleasure!
ReplyDeleteOh, and don't forget to add some pictures to illustrate your point. Add the pics to the blog.
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